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Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Human
health
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 and wellness are vital, so educational institutions should add extra initiatives to educate students about these two aspects.
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 essay agrees that additional measures are required to make pupils aware of general
health
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 and fitness. Allocating sometime, especially for teaching about the human body and its requirements apart from regular curriculum will benefit the students and two measures will be
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 discussed as a way to make students aware of them.
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 with, daily yoga sessions after school would be a viable solution. Yoga training will
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 include lectures which give a clear description of each part of the body, and its asana will help the body improve and maintain standards of mental
health
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 and physical fitness. Yoga is widely accepted and approved throughout the world, its roots are from India, and it is proved that 100% of the population who adopt yoga in daily their routine will see a drastic recovery in terms of human wellness just in 6 months. Another way is to educate students, encouraging them to consume homemade food. Schools can conduct sessions for parents and pupil regarding the importance of diet, and impose rules to carry their own meals every day rather than relying on fast food available in canteens.
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, a school in Japan, does not provide canteen facilities,
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, students consume only nutritious food made at home, and
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 has a great impact on students’
health
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 when compared to their counterparts from the other institutions. In conclusion, educational bodies conducting sports days and having regular classes is not enough, schools should go beyond and promote general
health
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 and fitness in the form of special activities which are to be conducted frequently.
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