Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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digital world, people are encircled with various types of advertisements. It is omnipresent
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all, TV adverts, Social Media Marketing, billboards, Personal advertisements and
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much
more diverse ways.
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While
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phenomenon is escalating to
extremely new level
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extreme new levels
extreme new level
an extreme new level
, people are in influence of it. In my view, it has more positive effects than harmful. Because of advertisements, people are aware of current products in
market
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the market
. At some extent, it educates the people and provides the knowledge. For an instance, In India serious disease like polio is no more and the major success goes to awareness campaign help by
famous personality
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famous personalities
the famous personality
a famous personality
with the use of digital marketing and TV advertisements.
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, to bind user with interest usually companies display various new idea and it
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adds
is added
major value in
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the entertainment world
.
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, the critical impacts are
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not avoidable.
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, it exposes kids and young generation towards the violence and inappropriate content sometime.
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, Advertisements with various discounts and offers, make people lure to do impulsive shopping. Increasing obesity is
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one of consequence of
advertisement
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advertising
of junk food.
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, few times people get influenced by various advertisings and tend to work more to achieve never ending desire of buying stuff,
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approach add up to the stress and frustration.
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more, kids might suffer from harmful psychological effects when their parents are unable to afford various products shown in advertisements. To put
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in a nutshell, I can say that advertisement is
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a beneficial phenomenon
with a number of insignificant drawbacks. In my view, negative advertising effects can be lowered with help of government using stringent approach and awareness campaigns.

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