The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. What problems could this situation cause? What are the solutions to address those problems?

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"Rich are getting richer and poor are getting
poor
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poorer
", is a common phrase that we hear not just in developing countries, but
also
in developed countries. It
errupts
start abruptly
erupts
erupt
due to
variety
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a variety
of causes, discrimination, corruption and the list
goes
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go
on. The number of people lying in the category of average is diminishing, due to people either making a big leap to the
priviledged
blessed with privileges
privileged
class
or
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or, on
on the contrary
, loosing everything
thus
widening the
gap
between the poor and rich. I would like to discuss the
casues
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
causes
cases
and possible solutions for the same in
this
essay.
Since
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For
centuries, people with low income have been dealt with great
critisism
disapproval expressed by pointing out faults or shortcomings
criticism
criticisms
in any field that they choose, rather due to nepotism, politics or just because of their race or
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
, the list of discrimination does not end. Even though we have
acheived
to gain with effort
achieved
modernization in almost all sectors and countries, but the
modernisation
making modern in appearance or behavior
modernization
of mind is still a rare commodity. There are so many cases where poor people cannot afford the basic necessity to study
causing lesser number
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a causing lesser number
of people qualifying for a particular field. We have heard and seen success stories of so many poor people making the home run and it always inspires us to do something amazing, but we rarely think, why did they have to face so much difficulty in the
first
place and how can we enlighten
this
blind side of society. NGO's
,
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,
Support groups and many working bodies have been trying to resolve
this
gap
, by providing the poor people the alms that are needed to compete in
this
modern world. There so many minor or major changes we can implement to overcome or
atleast
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at least
reduce
this
barrier. We can make sure we have unbiased reservations and special training programs that can help them, we can
also
introduce policies at corporate as well political levels
condeming
containing or imposing condemnation or censure
condemning
condemn
factors that restrict people of
particualr race
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a particular race
particular race
particular races
or income status from getting a post.
Also we
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Also, we
can increase the intensity of punishment for the people caught exploiting the poor for their own gains. We are all aware of the
distibution
(statistics) an arrangement of values of a variable showing their observed or theoretical frequency of occurrence
distribution
of people in the category of
underprivleged
lacking the rights and advantages of other members of society
underprivileged
and
luxorious
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
, but
untill goal
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the initial goal
initial goal
until goal
is to just go to
priviledged
blessed with privileges
privileged
zone, it will be difficult for us to reduce the
gap
. We should focus on reducing the
gap
,
thus
inducing an equality in the societies economic divide. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
would like
to quote
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to, quote
, "We may be born poor, but dying the same way would be our
faults
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fault
. If we dont help others we should not expect the same in return"
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