As compared to the past, children these days spend more of their leisure time indoors with computers and TV and less time outdoors. Describe some of the problems this lack of outdoor leisure time can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

There were four sports which boys participated more girls. Nowadays, it is more popular for children to spend
time
in the house doing computers and watching
TV
than spend outsides.
This
essay
will discuss the problems of spending too much
time
for computers and
TV
including
obesity
and lack of social interactions.
This
essay
will
also
suggest solutions to these
problems including
Accept comma addition
problems, including
setting the
time
limit
for using computers and provide children with some
time
for playing outside. One of the factors that increase
obesity
of children is that they spend more
time
using computers and watching
TV
. Computer and
TV
doesn’t cause
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don’t cause
children to move, so the amount of exercise has decreased.
In addition
, these children tend to eat some snacks
during playing game
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during game playing
in the house. I know that many children from my school who loves to playing the game
in
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on
with
the computer, have a tendency of
obesity
, because they are lacking of physical activity and overeat.
Thus
, computer and
TV
can be a bad influence for children. Children are not interacting with others when they use computers or watch
TV
. Even though they may use the Internet to communicate with others, it is not the same as face-to face interactions. Playing outdoors with other children gives many opportunities for social interaction, but computers and
TV
does not. Children learn to argue, cooperate, argue and share through playing outside. In
this
way, using computers or watching
TV
means that children will lose the opportunity to learn by interacting with one another. Both
school
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schools
and parents need to
limit
the amount of
time
that children use
computer
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the computer
or watch
TV
and encourage them to participate in active play. Children doesn’t know the importance of physical activity, so adults have to
limit
their
time
for using computers, and give children
time
to exercise and play with other children outdoors.
Then
, children would get enough exercise and learn to communicate with others. In conclusion, more children tend to spend
time
indoors using computers or watching
TV
compared to the past.
This
essay
discussed what is the problem of children spending less
time
playing outside
such
as
obesity
and lack of social skills.
This
essay
also
suggested that the solutions to
this
problem are twofold: setting the
time
limit
for computers and
TV
and force them to play outside.
Furthermore
, both males and females the least preferred playing hockey.
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