Government should spend money to increase the development of sport and art for school students rather than supporting professional sport and art performances for general public. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people, including me argue that law enforcing agency should concentrate and spend their budget on school cultural activities rather than spending money for professional sports.

However

, there is a group supporting to spend more money towards public performance, not towards school's activity. The following essay states the points to support my opinion.

Firstly

, in

this

modern world, it has been observed that lifestyle diseases are increasing a lot.

This

is mainly due to unhealthy eating habits and lack of physical exercise. So if the government can introduce extra-curriculum activities in the early educational classes,

then

it will help to make sure that kids are getting enough fitness time and the authority can protect them from lifestyle illness.

For instance

, in Kerala, the law agencies have started giving importance to sports and art from kinder gardens, which in turn, energized the students increased their concentration level in the studies.

Secondly

, most of the time, the early exposure to extra activities, may lights to create a hobby and later the hobby turns into as a profession.

Furthermore

, nowadays, competitions are there along with the practise. If a student won in the school race,

then

he will be eligible to enter in the district level and

this

will go till national level. By

this

way the educational system is creating athletes.

For example

, in Kerela, the state spent more than 15% of their budget to have cultural activities and training.

This

has given a very positive response from every citizen and most of the sports and arts persons have been identified from here. In conclusion, it is always good to spend a region's budget to encourage physical activities in the primary and secondary as

this

often leads to develop athletes and professionals to develop the country standard.

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Well-rounded individuals
Discovery of young talent
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Government should spend money to increase the development of sport and art for school students rather than supporting professional sport and art performances for general public. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people argue that technological interventions such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. What is the reason ? What can be done to resolve this problem?

Some people think that success in life comes from hard-working and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.