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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: • Give details of your study plans • Explain why you want to get a part-time job • Suggest how your friend could help you find a job. Start your letter with Dear …

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Dear Mark, As you already know, my planned move to your country is in a few months.
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, I would like to ask you to help me in finding a part-time job there. Even though part of my studies are remote, I still need to move to your country as some of my classes require me to attend in person for practical knowledge. The classes do not start until another 3 months, so it gives me ample time to plan ahead. Unfortunately, my aunt who promised to give me
stipend
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 during the duration of my studies has passed away.
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, I will need to find a part-time job to earn to cover my living expenses. I am open to even temporary positions for the first year or a few months. In short,
due to
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 my though situation, I need you to help me with finding a job. I remember you telling me that your brother had worked for several restaurants in your city as a chef. If you could get him to ask around for an open position
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 as waiter or kitchen staff, I would be forever thankful. Hope to hear back from you soon Best wishes, Farman

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down paragraphs further if one paragraph contains multiple ideas for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph centers around a single main idea and develops it fully.
task achievement
Address certain explanations with more detail, such as why the part-time work is necessary now after the change in financial situations.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and appropriate tone throughout.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, providing a polite start and end.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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