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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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Daily engagement of man in various activities concerning the environment has lead to crucial consequences
such
 as death of
species
 and undesirable level of biodiversity. Analysing the causes of loss of biodiversity which is environmental pollution, as well as continuous farming will prove
this
.
Also
, ways to ameliorate these problems will be discussed.
To begin
, the ecology of plants and animals is highly threatened by environmental pollutants which is mostly carbon and other less harmful elements like nitrogen. Many
species
 are being lost today due to high CO saturation in the atmosphere. To clarify, the use of fossil fuel, deforestation and disposing of trash in water bodies, are human practices that reduce the level of oxygen even in the water bodies.
This
, activities endanger the lives of living organisms.
Therefore
, a number of
species
 are lost in the endangered environment.
Furthermore
, farm lands are always tilled causing the extinction of beneficial organisms. Continuous farming is widely practiced leading to erosion and loss of soil nutrient.
Likewise
, fishing, people continue to fish in a particular river without considering the adverse effect of these unceasing practices. The government has a role to play in curbing these unhealthy activities that endanger the ecosystem.
First
, people should be encouraged to use public transport.
This
 way, there will be fewer cars,
also
 air and noise pollution will drastically reduce.
Secondly
, there should be some sort of regulations and law enforcements on farming and fishing practices.
Thus
, reducing the dangers imposed on the affected
species
.
Finally
, logging should be highly prohibited. Trees should be allowed to grow and there should be a reward for planting trees. In conclusion, man-made problems affecting the environment adversely can be curtailed with the political will.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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