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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

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In today’s modern societies, the
rate
 many young people engage in various crimes are on the
rise especially
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rise, especially
 in major cities round the globe. There are many reasons that led to
this
action
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action, such
such
 as peer pressure and unemployment factors,
however there
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however, there
 are possible solutions to remedy
this
 epidemic situation.
Firstly
, one of the prime causes of increased
crime
 among the young people today is peer pressure. Many youth
are being forced
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is being forced
 into
crime
as a result
 of the influence their mates are having on them.
For instance
, most of their mates who engage in various nefarious crimes
such
 as
cyber-
crime committed using a computer and the internet to steal a person's identity or sell contraband or stalk victims or disrupt operations with malevolent programs
cybercrime
crime
 and internet fraud lived a flashy lifestyle and as
such
 many people want to engage in the same activities they do.
In addition
,
society
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societal
 influence is
also
 another factor that
have led
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has led
 many youth
into
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in
crime
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criminal
 activities. Many young people want to be respected among members of the
society
 and as
such
 engage in crimes so as to get rich and feel among the high class of the
society
.
Furthermore
, unemployment is another
causes
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cause
 of
crime
 among the growing population as many youths are currently idle.
Nevertheless
, there are possible solutions to these increased
crime
rate
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rates
. One of which is
government
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the government
 enforcing strict laws and regulation so as to deter young people from engaging in crimes.
Also
, there can be public awareness in the
society
 against the effect of
crime
rate
 among the
teaming
abundantly filled with especially living things
teeming
 population.
This
 will go a long way to prevent people from engaging in crimes.
For instance
, using
bill board
large outdoor signboard
billboard
 to create awareness on how youths who engage in
crime
 could end up their bright future in jail.
In addition
, creation of jobs, mentoring programmes can
also
 help to reduce
crime
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the crime rate
rate
. In conclusion, there are various reasons why the youths engage in
crimes but
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crimes, but
 government enforcing strict laws and regulation and
also
 creating more awareness can help to limit the
crime
rate
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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