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The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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The rise of human
population
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, an ongoing global concern, is caused by technological advancements since the Industrial Revolution. While
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 issue is widely considered as one of the most serious problems, in my opinion, the greatest threat to humanity in the 21st century is
climate
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. A rapid growth of human
population
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 usually coincides with a technological outbreak. Since the Industrial Revolution, human society has gradually shifted from craft production to machines.
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, for the
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 time, mass production is available.
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 situation increases life expectancy of the majority of the people by providing stable food supplies and medical treatments.
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, world
population
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 has risen; now it has passed the point of 7.5 billion. The consequences of an increasing
population
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 are detrimental.
Overpopulation
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 is the reason for
overconsumption
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, which results in resource depletion and environmental degradation. Unemployment is
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 seen in densely populated areas.
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,
climate
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,
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 of
overpopulation
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, is the biggest global challenge nowadays. Many developed nations have
low
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lower
 birth rates due to high level of education;
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,
overpopulation
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 does not happen on a global scale.
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,
climate
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change
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 has been affecting both of ecosystems and social systems around the world. From an environmental perspective,
climate
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change
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 creates more extreme weather conditions,
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 hampering the agricultural industry.
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, global warming leads to sea level rises, which forces the people in coastal regions to migrate.
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 situation causes many social issues,
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 as
overpopulation
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 or criminality. To conclude, the recent rise of world
population
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 happens due to technological advancements.
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, despite human
overpopulation
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 and its negative effects, what should be addressed
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 and foremost is
climate
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