Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason to doing this? is this a negative or positive development?

In present days young generation is exposed by parents to
education
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educate
and choosing
proffesion
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a profession
profession
professions
provision
that they consider successful
for
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in
their future. Depending on measure of
pressure
,
this
can be affected positively or negatively. I believe that a moderate
pressure
should be present on
time
in the
child
's upbringing. Parental duty is to properly guide own kid to a successful life. The goal of each good parent is to provide the
child
with focused knowledge about the real world, in which always continuous tremendous competition an all sectors
such
as science, sport, art, business, work etc. At the same
time
as a matured
child
who does not have an education and does not have a good profession and work, he will not be grateful to the parent who did not overlook well in
time
and did not put
pressure
in order to help him understand
this
when he cannot, due to his childish thinking. Undoubtedly the direction should not be rude or with punishment, it should be without harm to the children’s psyche. I believe that the influence supposes to be opened by
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explaining
and giving examples of what can happen in case of choosing wrong way.
For example
, on my own experience, since I was a
child I
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child, I
was totally sure that I am perfect in sport,
however
it was not so. One day my parents explained my two outcomes from my choice for life and from what they offer (at that
time
it was a
humanitarian
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humane
education), I, as a
child
, certainly didn’t want to believe them, but after weighing everything and thinking over their words I agreed to change my choice. Now I am thankful that they showed me a
wright
an abstract idea of that which is due to a person or governmental body by law or tradition or nature
right
way to a successful life. To sum up,
definitely
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define
defines
parental
pressure
has always existed.
however
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However
, I believe that the right
pressure
and influence will be a positive aspect in raising children.
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  • Excessive pressure
  • Academic achievements
  • Professional success
  • Secure future
  • Social comparison
  • Competitive environment
  • Psychological impact
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Resilience
  • Work ethic
  • Emotional well-being
  • Supportive parenting
  • Achievements
  • Life skills
  • Balance
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