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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongest all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. DO YOU THINK THAT THE ADVANTAGES OF SOCIAL MEDIA OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

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It is true that social media has revolutionized the way in which people communicate with each other, and it has affected people at different ages from children to the elderly. While I accept that sharing private information on the social platform might have dangerous effects. I believe that social media is more likely to be beneficial. On the one hand, social media can be seen as negative for both security and psychological reasons. From a security perspective, social media has made people more likely to be exposed to cyber fraud. Information
such
 as Email address, phone number and home address that the user puts on his profile are visible for everyone;
therefore
, criminals can use
this
 information to pose as that user in order to commit crimes or to steal user's bank account
for example
. On a psychological level, social media considered to be addictive and productivity killer. That
people
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person
 today spend most of their time surfing social application, chatting with friends and watching video clips all of which are useless
activates
any specific behavior
activities
 that have no beneficial outcome
on
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of
 one's life.
However
, I would argue that these drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits. Social media can have made it easier for people to find job opportunities. In social platforms
such
 as Linkedin, people who are seeking new job share their qualification and experience, that way employers who looking for employees can easily find them using the
web site
a computer connected to the internet that maintains a series of web pages on the World Wide Web
website
 system.
In addition
, social media
also
 has facilitated the way in which people looking for a life partner. Every day, there are thousands of successful relationships created between couples who want to marry who are met
on
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with
 social media that
otherwise
 they would never be met. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential benefits of social media are more significant than the possible risks.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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