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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara dessert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Humans are wanderers which brings a streak of adventure in them
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They love to explore places which are difficult to visit, and in quest of achieving something impossible they go to any extent,
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 visiting remote places like Sahara desert or the
Antartica
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.Of course
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visiting
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 places has
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 advantages and disadvantages. In regards to benefits, being situated at the farthest corner of the world the
Antartica
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 possess a raw beauty
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 provides the tourists a beautiful sight to behold.Extreme climatic conditions in
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 Sahara desert and the
Antartica
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 gives them the feeling of adventure as well as a sense of achievement to survive in
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 a harsh climate.They learn a lot about unexplored geographical spheres on the earth.There are numerous examples how people make records by reaching at
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 an unusual place
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 their maiden trip.
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disadvantages mostly comprise of safety issues.Harsh climatic conditions can be proved fatal to them.In the secluded and dried places like Sahara desert might cause
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a shortage
shortages
 of food and water. Places like
Antartica
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 have not even a single soul
suriviving
still in existence
surviving
 there.
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Which
 can lead to the sense of
lonliness
the state of being alone in solitary isolation
loneliness
.Various reports are there to show how people get stuck
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in
on
 an abandoned island for months or even years.
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, they can always have a proper information and safety measures to survive
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in
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 places. To sum up
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visiting unusual places has
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 benefits and disadvantages and it creates a lot of memories in
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 the aspects.The key is to keep courage and be prepared.

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