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Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think that fresh water supply should be controlled strictly by governments as the sources are limited. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Water
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 is the most common liquid found on earth. While most part of our planet is covered with
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, fresh
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 that can be used for drinking, cooking and other activities is quite less. Despite the aforementioned fact, some people still give themselves the right to use fresh
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 in an unrestricted way. Others oppose that it is necessary for the authorities to strictly control the amount of
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 usage. From my perspective, I side the latter opinion;
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 it is certain that
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the humanities
 will have enough fresh
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 for at least the
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 100 years, but still, it is a limited resource. If people freely allow themselves to use clean
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 even in an extravagant way, it is
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 that they will put their
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 generations under a risk of having no fresh
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 to use.
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, I agree that
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 resource should be accessible
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 every one’s needs, especially for agriculture and industries, they all need a large supply of
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 for producing.
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, there should be a consideration in using
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 for any purposes. They can take simple actions to consume it more efficiently, like turning off taps whenever they are brushing or shaving, and finding opportunities to conserve
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 in their home. The main purpose of controlling the
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 usage after all is to ensure that there are no knock-on effects on our
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 generations and there is always available
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 for everybody. So, in my opinion, the government plays an important role in raising awareness and encouraging a
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a drastic and far-reaching change in ways of thinking and behaving
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 in public. They can educate their citizens
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on
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 how vital is our action today can effect on the future or basically, passing
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-saving ordinances. In conclusion, no one can deny the importance of
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, especially fresh
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 in our daily lives. Individual responsibility as well as the government’s role should be considered to conserve
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 resource.
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,
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 still can be accessible to everyone’s needs, but not for waste.
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