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Do you think that place where the person grew has an influence on his accomplishments? Explain with example.

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Indeed every
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Indeed, every
person
 in the modern world will get influenced
from
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by
 the environment and the community
were
In or at or to what place
where
 they
grown
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have grown
are grown
grew
 up. In my opinion, influences
such
 as political or economical can be a factor. In
this
 essay I will analyse how the said reasons can influence a
person
. Today, we are living in a competitive environment. Every country is trying to come up with different business ideas to improve their economy.
This
create
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creates
 situations where the citizens are responsible to come up with own business or
employeement
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
 to gain market or to improve the business for their
employeer
a person or firm that employs workers
employer
employees
employers
.
This
 makes a
person
 more competitive, and will gradually
accomblish
put in effect
accomplish
accomplished
 more on what they do.
Similarly
,
economical
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economic
 situation in a country
also
 influences a
person
's life.
For example
, countries like Somalia and Ethiopia
has not have
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has not had
 enough food resources to feed their people with five meals a day.
Hence
 the people in those countries need to survive with lesser food choices. They even can survive without food; for a day or more when
comparing
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compared
comparison
 to the people
from
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of
 a prosperous country. Summing up, every
person
 has a story on how they grew up surviving different situations. It may be a
polical
involving or characteristic of politics or parties or politicians
political
 or an
economical
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economic
 background that made the
person
 to accomplish more.

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