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People usually mix their private and professional life. What are the pros and cons of this?

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In the modern world, companies provide extraordinary work culture so as the employees could take advantage of working more hours and
hence
 more money.
This
 can help the employee to get a professional ethics, and good mental health. Whereas it can affect the relationship with own family, as they cannot keep a proper balance. Here I am discussing the reasons of one's private and professional life should not be mixed.
Firstly
, working for a professional company can give a good discipline in one's lifestyle.
This
 is because the company requires to concentrate on the job since it always has a deadline linked to business revenue.
This
 creates a habit of finishing tasks on time.
This
 in turn can be good for his or her personality.
Also
, it provides a good mental health by solving tasks, and
hence
 the brain will be more active. It can make him more productive.
However
, a professional work which oriented only towards a business goal can affect one's relationship with his family.
This
 is because many people are unable to complete their assignments at the office on time, and
hence
 they are forced to extend his or her office hours.
This
 reduces their time with family. Not only it affects the relationship, but
also
 personal well being.
This
 will make him more workaholic and can adversely affect. To conclude, disadvantage outweighs advantages when private and professional living is mixed. It is proved that professional ethics give a person good discipline as well as mental health. Where as it affects his private life and possibility of becoming a workaholic.
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