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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In recent decade, one of the major problems which our environment as well as the people suffers is the pollution. The reason is the increased use of
fuel
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 consuming vehicles
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 as cars, two-wheelers, etc. Even though a lot of steps taken in controlling the pollution, its influence is not considerably seen. Some of them think that increasing the charges of Petrol/Diesel has a chance to reduce the usage of cars. I totally disagree with the statement. Let me figure out the reasons in the remaining part of the essay.
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, In
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 mechanical life, where people are put under mental pressure are less likely to accept the physical stress caused due to travelling by government vehicles.
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, it takes a bit longer duration to reach their work sites. The condition of the fares in public vehicles is
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 that people don't feel any difference using their own vehicle or the common transportation.
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, the new generation people have a general mindset that going to a place in car will be a symbol of their pride and status. Having a private vehicle wherever we go, reduces the time we wait for a bus or booking a cab. For an instance, if the time taken to reach a place of 10km distance by bus is 1 hour, the duration to reach the same place by a car will be not more than 30 minutes.
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 will ultimately change people's preference in choosing their mode of transport irrespective of the cost.
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,
fuel
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 is used by all other vehicles
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 as trucks, lorries, which carry goods from one location to another. So appreciating the charges of petrol or diesel can have a severe effect resulting in the cost of goods.
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 can have a serious economic issues, wherein the demand for a product produced by the countryside people goes low. So, I would like to conclude by saying that increasing the charges of
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 will have only a less or no influence on the usage of a car or other modes of private transportation. So the government can implement some other rules to restrict or limit the usage of private vehicles
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 of increasing the cost of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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