In recent years, there has been a considerable rise in crimes committed by young people in cities. what has caused this ? what solutions can you suggest ?

Personal statement and Study Plan To: whom it may concern! Dear Sir/Madam From a
remote landlocked
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remote, landlocked
country, I am Khwaja Walid Sharaar, From Parwan a city of Afghanistan. I was born in 1993 within a dark period where seeking shelter and food were the priorities and education almost forgotten. My father was an engineer and my mom is a housewife, these two were the two blessed souls always encouraging me to learn from the beginning. I joined school in a hard situation, but insecurity, poverty and war didn`t stop me from learning on
such
situation my family
persuade
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persuades
me for continuing my studies. I went through school
career
with plenty of
hardships but
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hardship, but
hardship but
reached the finish line with success and a high degree. Since high school
graduation I
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graduation, I
was fond of continuing my higher education specially my master`s abroad my homeland for making new experiences, meeting new people, new environments and intellectual exchange with others. Relying on expanding my knowledge and what I already have in my mind, I have always tried new ways of learning, how to solve a problem of my own more often by myself. By and by,
such
activities, commendations and own volitions become my commitment and sentiment I choose to become a computer expert. I lucked out and got admission in Kabul University at Computer Science faculty. Learning Software
development
for four years, conducting various projects and acquaintance of new fellows and professors in a new environment were derivations for me to become more interested and
hardworking
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hard working
in started field. During university
career
, we were involved both in experimental and theory based studies and we were working on different assignments and presentations in teams and groups. I was specifically interested in subjects
such
as
Database
Development
, Communication skills, Project Management and Information Management Systems. I have done several field works during university
career
. Late 2012 I started working as
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intern ship
in Afghanistan Health Information Management System HMIS-MoPH (Ministry of Public Health) department for betterment of my experience in the field. On January 2013, I officially joined Health Management Information System Department under supervision of Evaluation and Health Information System General Directorate of Public Health Ministry. As a
Database
Manager Assistant, I was developing, collecting data from 34 provinces of HMIS replicas, analysis,
onsite
taking place or located at the site
on-site
troubleshooting of databases, making reports and supervision of HMIS systems implementation throughout Afghanistan. That was starting point for my
career
after one and half year I was promoted to
positon
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position
positions
of
Database
Manager.
However
, in
past position
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the past position
past positions
, I was developing and maintaining some information
systems but
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systems, but
while I started working as
Database
Manager I deal to work mostly in
development
phase, departmental budget planning for
preplanned
workshops, I implemented and conducted
database
and data using workshops around the country for related persons. In 2014, I acquired membership of Afghanistan Developer Community Codeweekend. In the same years, several technology
gathering
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gatherings
, conferences and round table were held up in different
development
private companies by the association board and members.
For instance
, Introducing new technologies and we worked together in
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real projects
a real project
.
Thus
, considering these gaps and challenges I was convinced to advance my education in Computer Science. I think studying at abroad is a unique opportunity for me to fulfil my dreams of becoming an excellent computer science expert. Being a part of
applied master degree
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an applied master degree
as a participant will expose me to some international experiences and I will learn many new lessons.
As a result
, it motivates me to get advantages of
this
course, which will build on my capacity, and I would be able to contribute in
development
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the development
and strengthening an effective and efficient system in Afghanistan. Giving a chance
to
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for
applicants from vital sectors like health, which has a high demand for professionals and experts throughout the
world specifically
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world, specifically
in poor countries and the least developed countries like Afghanistan, will overcome health challenges worldwide. Regards Khwaja Walid Sharaar Bachelor of Computer Science in Software Engineering Kabul, Afghanistan

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