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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

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It is argued that whether there should be law legislation to make
vaccination
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 obligatory for children to acquire the immune system to common childhood diseases.It is agreed that
vaccines
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vaccine
 injection should become mandatory for children in order to protect them from
certains
definite but not specified or identified
certain
 disease.
This
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 essay will discuss about the benefit and the safeness it can bring to our society if
vaccination
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 becomes compulsory
to
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for
 children Compulsory immunization of all children is one of the best way to protect our society from infectious diseases. When a large percentage of a population has become
immue
relating to the condition of immunity
immune
 to an infection, thereby providing a measure of protection for individuals who are not immune.
For example
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, in 2005 an 10
months
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month
 old Chinese girl contracted polio and spread the disease to four other unvaccinated
children but
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children, but
 because of the community met the immunity threshold for the disease, there was no polio outbreak. Not just protecting our live, mandatory
vaccination
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also
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 help us to save children and their parents time and money. Vaccines cost less in time and money to obtain than infectious diseases cost in time off of work to care for a sick child and medical costs. For
instances
Suggestion
instance
, children above five with Mumps is
insfected
containing or resulting from disease-causing organisms
infected
inspected
 16 to 18 days and
accroding
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
 to AHC cost their parent
avagre
approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value
average
 20 to 100 hours of wages at around 200 dollars to 1000 dollars.
Furthermore
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, there has been many
vaccine
Suggestion
vaccines
avaible
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
 to prevent
this
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 kind of diseases with a relatively low price, so if children is vaccinated to prevent
this
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 kind of infectious, parents will economically and
socailly
by or with respect to society
socially
 beneficial In conclusion, required
vaccination
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 for children has many benefits both in social and economical.
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Therefore there
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Therefore, there
 should be a law
enforced childern
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enforced, children
enforced children
 to be immunized in order to build a better society without contagious diseases
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