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Some People believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #sport #ability #work #practice
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Some people consider
natural abilty
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the natural ability
natural ability
natural abilities
 to be successful in sports, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 have
this
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 point of view that doing
alot
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a lot
 of
practice
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 and hard
work
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 is what makes you successful.
However
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, I believe that both factors are important to be successful but hard
work
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 and
practice
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 is more important. The essay will discuss and explains these measures. In the terms of natural ability, many people have
this
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 opinion that natural
abiities
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
abilities
 are extremely
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
.
Alot
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A lot
 of people are born with natural talent that did really helped them with sports and other life activities. But many people believe that hard
work
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 and practices plays a major role.
For example
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, a psychologist agreed with his wife that they should give their
daughter
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daughters
, the education and training according to the psychological book of kids. They did that and now their daughter is the
second
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 world's greatest chess
player
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.
Finally
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, in my opinion, training and working hard is the key to success. With the above mentioned example, Her parents trained her to be a chess
player
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, she is a
second
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 world's best chess
player
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 because of her parent's polished her, not because of her natural talent. But if a person
have
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has
natural talent
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a natural talent
the natural talent
 to be a
sportsmen
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sportsman
 like to be a footballer, cricketer, hockey
player
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 etc.
they
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They
 still need
practice
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becaue
for the reason that; on account of
because
practice
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 makes a
men
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man
 perfect and there is no doubt in that. In conclusion, Both these factors are important to be a successful person in sports. But doing
alot
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a lot
 of hard
work
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 and
practice
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 plays a very important role. If a person
have
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has
is having
 natural ability, they still need
alot
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a lot
 of
practice
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 to sharpen up their skills.
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