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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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In each country, there is the specific laws and rules encounter by the reasons. I believe without reasons the government will not impose
non sense
a message that seems to convey no meaning
nonsense
 rules. In
this
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 case, I
am strongly agreed
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have strongly agreed
strongly agree
 to the policy of being protective the teenagers going out alone at
nigh
the time after sunset and before sunrise while it is dark outside
night
time
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 without
accompanied
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accompanying
 in terms of their safety and avoiding danger manners. These days, there are so many cases are
happened
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happening
 and mostly happened at night
time
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 since dark enhance people to do harmful things. We keep hearing about
raped
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rape
raping
 cases
on
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in
 the news. In some of the places, it is really dangerous for the grown people to go out alone at night
time
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. Especially girls, they can be
rapped
covered with or as if with clothes or a wrap or cloak
wrapped
 and murder.
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, there
is
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are
 the kidnapped cases
to
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of
 the matured men or women for the purpose of human
traficking
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
trafficking
. To avoid those cases, it is really good thing that the teens should go out
by
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with
 someone who can protect them.
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, so many illegal activities
are happened
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have happened
happen
 in the night
time
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 like gambling, using drugs and so on. Since teenage
time
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 is the
exploring
cause to burst with a violent release of energy
exploding
 world with the
curiousity
a state in which you want to learn more about something
curiosity
, they may want to give a try on those harmful things. May be for the
time
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first
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time
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, they may not
try but
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try, but
time
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 to
time
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 when the friends encourage to give a try, they may tend to be in the trap.
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, as a youth, they do not want to get
tie
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tied
in
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with
 their hands and they love to seek the freedom and independent
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. So the parents should
do
engage in
make
 some adjustments based on the place where they go and situation. As with everything, I believe that as a citizen, we should have trust on the government policy and rules that can benefit to our life style. In
this
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 case, imposing the curfew of not letting the teenage go out alone is vital and should be applied in other countries too.

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