Some people think that we live in a society where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that his is improving our lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Today's world,

money

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and possessions are considered valuable things in each individual

life

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but some

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think

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only secures our lives. In

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essay, I will be discussing both positive and negative aspects and

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my opinion with few

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we all know that

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is regarded as

most important thing

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the most important thing

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's.

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gives power and helps in maintaining the status in the place where you reside.Now days, for basic needs and for

education we

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education, we

need

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. So no doubt

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the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender

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plays an important things in

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life

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, school fees

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buying groceries, transport for all

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we need

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, I believe

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can help us in getting all materialistic things and that's why it is considered important.But

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can't help in building and maintaining relations in society.

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can help in achieving good quality

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life but

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life, but

cannot help in buying human values.

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money

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can help us in buying

comfortness but

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comforts, but

comforts but

it cannot give peace and positivity

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To sum up, each individual has his or her own point of view to see the importance of

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lifes but

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life, but

life but

it's all on our hand how much

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we give to it. In my view

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money

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important but

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important, but

not everything.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

207 words

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Some people think that we live in a society where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that his is improving our lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries, the number of plants and animals are declining. why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehical will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing are as important to a child's development as other subjects so it should bes compulsory in high schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people think a country benefits from a large proportion of young university students, others think sending young people to universities only lead to graduate unemployment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.