Some people think that we live in a society where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that his is improving our lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Today's world,

money

and possessions are considered valuable things in each individual

life

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but some

thinks

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think

that

this

only secures our lives. In

this

essay, I will be discussing both positive and negative aspects and

also

my opinion with few

example

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examples

Firstly

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we all know that

money

is regarded as

most important thing

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the most important thing

life

's.

Money

gives power and helps in maintaining the status in the place where you reside.Now days, for basic needs and for

education we

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education, we

need

money

. So no doubt

monay

the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender

money

plays an important things in

everyones

life

For instance

, school fees

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buying groceries, transport for all

this

we need

money

However

, I believe

money

can help us in getting all materialistic things and that's why it is considered important.But

money

can't help in building and maintaining relations in society.

Money

can help in achieving good quality

life but

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life, but

cannot help in buying human values.

For instance

money

can help us in buying

comfortness but

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comforts, but

comforts but

it cannot give peace and positivity

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To sum up, each individual has his or her own point of view to see the importance of

money

lifes but

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life, but

life but

it's all on our hand how much

weightage

the product of voltage and current

wattage

we give to it. In my view

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money

important but

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important, but

not everything.

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2Word repetition
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