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Home schooling belongs to the past and it is completely unacceptable in the modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this situation

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In the
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 few decades, schooling is no longer restricted to a specific place. Rather, people are beginning to teach their children within the confines of their house. Whilst some are concerned that
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 is wrong, I strongly believe that it is a potential pathway. On the one hand, schooling at home deprives the younger ones the ability to socialize. The argument to support
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 is that one of the places where a child can learn interpersonal skills is in the classroom. Since, he is being taught from homely taught,
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 social ability remains dormant. The Punch newspaper,
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, reported that mothers who engage
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 new method are uncomfortable with the inability of their wards to relate with other members of the society.
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 could affect on them later in life.
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, I do not believe that the aforementioned view stand up to scrutiny.
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, house tutoring gives parents the chance to spend more time with their children.
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, they have all the time to play and know the personality of each child better.
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, teaching by parents ensures that each pupil is taught at his own pace, giving room for emphasis and corrections. The Queen's university,
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, revealed a study in 2017 that students who were home-tutored performed better in mathematics than their counterparts who had their classes in the school.
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, justifying
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 new trend. In conclusion, we have found a new ground for the
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 generation where they can be educated within the confines of their habitat and yet they have all the attention that they so desire.
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