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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In every course in the tertiary institutions, the same number of both sexes should be admitted. I totally agree with
this
 because the acceptance of boys and girls in every subject at the University would foster
gender
 equality and prevent discrimination. The main reason why I agree that institutions of higher learning ought to take equal numbers of male and female students is because it will promote
gender
 equality. Learners will have the same opportunity to explore their individual potentials.
For example
, my younger sister, Judith, who studied Mechanical Engineering, a course
that is
 seen as 'masculine', graduated with a
first
 class. She was not intimidated by the common belief.
Also
, it will prevent discrimination.
That is
, the masculine or feminine students will not feel cheated, short changed or less of themselves.
This
 will in turn build their confidence in other areas of life as they enter into the labour market. Recent studies by the institute of statistics, conducted in 2010, revealed that the best chefs in the world are males.
In other words
, nothing is restricted to a particular
gender
.
Hence
, giving equal opportunities to people opens doors to a more realistic world. In conclusion, I completely agree that higher institutions should take the same number of boys and girls In every subject to enhance equal rights and prevent subduing hidden potentials in the name of '
gender
 respect'..
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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