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Home schooling belongs to the past and it is completely unacceptable in the modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this situation

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After parents,
school
 is the
second
place when
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place, when
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 get their educations. They start to learn in a different way. If parents
gives
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give
 life skills to their children, teachers are those who give them a wide knowledge. Once,
school
 was not so frequented and most of
children
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the children
 take
lessions
a unit of instruction
lessons
lesson's
lesson
 from private teachers who goes at their home for teaching but today everything have changed in a drastic way. Elementary
school it's
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school, it's
 an
obligation
 for children and they should attend their classes. In
this
 essay I will discuss about
pros
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the pros
 and cons of home schooling. People tend to make easier their life in different ways. One big issue is related
with
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to
 learning which is a process that
firstely
before anything else
firstly
that is
 elementary
school
, starts with
obligation
 and ends with personal
choicse
the person or thing chosen or selected
choice
choices
checks
 by taking different diplomas or
trainging
activity leading to skilled behavior
training
. In ancient times people
society
have been seperated
Suggestion
has been separated
have been separated
 in
clases
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
class
classes
:
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:
 low class or poor class which was mostly uneducated, middle class which was educated by their desire and high
clasess
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
classes
closes
class
 when all people have been very well educated with
privat
confined to particular persons or groups or providing privacy
private
 teachers chosen by their parents. It was very visible difference between
this
classes
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class
 because their manner of talking or thinking. Today everything have been changed. Peoples have
possibility
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the possibility
 to take
lessions
a unit of instruction
lessons
 in buildings constructed
ocasionally
now and then or here and there
occasionally
 for all people. Classes are not as important as having a good teacher and
society
 that tomorrow may
became
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become
leader
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a leader
leaders
, as every
classes
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class
 it's not
relating
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related
 with inheritance but with knowledge and their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Being related
with
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to
 different people in
society
 means that people start to respect each other decision about their life and accept people as they are.
Society
 have been changed in a good way since the government have decided that everyone have as an
obligation
 the elementary
school
 in a public or private
school
, so everyone will see how capable they are. In conclusion, modern
society
have grown
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has grown
 the competition of
people
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peoples
knoledge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
acknowledge
 whatever their economy income is and will help even gifted people
for
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in
enhance
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enhancing
enhanced
 their intelligence by their
society
.
Government
Suggestion
The government
 is working for equality by making elementary
school
 as an
obligation
 and helping those who have a low income economy and even more by giving free
lessions
a unit of instruction
lessons
 for those who want to follow higher education, too.

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