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Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists? Do you agree or disagree? Support with reasons and examples from your own experience

#people #entertainers #scientists #support
From the topic I choose to disagree that entertainers are more important than
scientist
 and I will give reasons with each paragraph. Before we begin, we need to know who is an
entertainer and
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entertainer, and
 who is a
scientist
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 An entertainer can be described as a person who is in the showbiz or entertainment industry either as a singer or as an actor. An entertainer is a professional in his field and is usually associated with movies or music. Entertainers like 50
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, Brad Pitt are well known and popular and they bring their own influence on our social life either through fashion or the roles they play in movies. A
scientist
 is usually a scholar or in layman’s
term;a
 very smart person who is tasked or has a burning desire to do research to find solutions to natural phenomenon.
Phenomenons
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Phenomena
 are and not limited to
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 1. Space 2. Medicine 3. Physics 4. Chemistry 5. The ecosystem. With scientists, we have been able to advance in technology
,
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,
 making life better and making living easier through thorough research by findings and inventions done by
scientist
. Life is
science
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a science
 and all what we know today was a result of
scientist
.
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 The knowledge of
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space, for
for
example was
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example, was
 started and discovered by
scientist
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science
,
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 the human anatomy was
also
 studied and explained to us by
scientist
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science
 and so on. It might even be fair to say that entertainers may not be where or what they are today if science was not seen as an
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important
 to the human race.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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