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Some people say that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others say that it is getting easier. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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The way of living in cities is quite debatable topic. There are different takes by people regarding the
life
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 in cities. In
this
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 essay we will discuss about the positives and negatives of living in cities and argue why living in
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city
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the city
a city
cities
 is easier. As everything in the world,
city
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 style of living has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 pros and cons.
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First let
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First, let
 us focus on the positive aspects. There are many job
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 available here to pursue dreams of an
indivdual
a human being
individual
. The way of
life
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 is simple and easy as everything can be brought to
door step
the sill of a door; a horizontal piece of wood or stone that forms the bottom of a doorway and offers support when passing through a doorway
doorstep
 with the help of smart phone. We can meet people from different cultures and can lead a diverse
life
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. The educational and sports
acadamies
a secondary school (usually private)
academies
 are plenty and great, which is very helpful for the parents with kids. On the down side, there are some troubles to be faced in
city
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life
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 like traffic, pollution and cost of living is
also
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 very high.
For example
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, the rent on a double bedroom flat in
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city
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the city
 will be approximately twenty thousand rupees.
Where as
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Whereas
, the same flat would cost you around ten thousand if you occupy the same flat in a small town. The traffic which causes
pollution both
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pollution, both
 can be eradicated if we don't live in big cities. So, what
dermines
establish after a calculation, investigation, experiment, survey, or study
determines
 the difficulty level of living in cities? It is
upto
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up to
 the way of living of the individual. If he/she uses public transport and tends to grow plantations,
atleast
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at least
 in his locality, the problems will be minimised and the positive aspects will come to
lime light
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the lime light
 and so the living in the
city
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 will become easy.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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