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It is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible – you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#technology #cultures #tradition
Some people believe that technological development and traditions can hardly thrive together. From my perspective,
although
 technology can truly have a bad influence on social customs, it
also
 can be of great benefit in preserving cultures. On the one hand, modern generations have less social contact compared with their ancestors.
This
,
consequently
, has led to lack of warmth and affection between members of the one family and societies as a whole.
For example
, nowadays, people are used to congratulate each other’s on feasts and happy occasions by only sending memorized cell phone messages and emails. They really do not bother themselves by visiting relatives and friends or even calling them!
Moreover
, developments of mass media have transferred local traditions and habits on a global scale.
This
 can be witnessed by the worldwide sharing of various traditional clothes and food which are no longer specific
for
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to
 certain countries.
Thus
, the sense of identity is easily lost
between
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among
 youth and children.
On the other hand
, some cultures extremely benefit from the advances in technology. Take some agricultural
communities
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communities, for
for example
, they use modern vehicles in
farming which
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farming, which
 provide great flourishing to their societies.
Furthermore
, modern developments in printing and publishing processes have
provide
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provided
 us with the ability to preserve
out
of or belonging to us
our
 cultural manuscripts and books.
This
 has led to
spread
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the spread
 of knowledge and researches of different world civilizations. In conclusion, traditional cultures can be lost in some fields of life out of the technological
development but
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development, but
,
in
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at
 the same time, cultures are immensely preserved by these developments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • incompatible
  • technological advancements
  • cultural preservation
  • historical heritage
  • globalization
  • hybridization
  • digital divide
  • cross-cultural interaction
  • economic incentives
  • generational perspectives
  • disruption
  • cultural identity
  • evolution of tradition
  • cultural resilience
  • heritage conservation
  • information technology
  • multiculturalism
  • cultural assimilation
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