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In some countries quality of life in larger cities is decling. Why do you think is happening and what measurebcan be taken?

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It is believed the living standards of people is
degradating
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degrading
degradation
 day by day in some countries which have large cities.
This
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 essay will discuss reasons
of
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for
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this types
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this type
these types
 of
problem
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 and
also
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 discuss on
method
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a method
 which need to
carried
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carry
 out by
government
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 and people to tackle
this
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problem
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. To commence with, quality of
life
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 of individual in some
countries cities
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countries, cities
such
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 as Delhi,
kathmandu
the capital and largest city of Nepal
Kathmandu
, Lahore and so on is
decling
grow worse
declining
dealing
decline
 due to increase
number
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 of population.
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, traffic congestion is becoming
major
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a major problem
problem
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 due to
rapid increase
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the rapid increase number
a rapid increase number
number
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 of public with
plummeted
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plummeting
 private vehicles. Not only
this
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, because of more
number
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 of
vehicles
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vehicle
 environment is being polluted which has
direct impact
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a direct impact
 on human
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life styles
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyles
. For
instances
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instance
, vehicles
produces
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produce
 large emission of exhaust fumes and pollute the air.
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, increase urbanisation has become key factor which has
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
detrimental effects
 on healthy
life
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 of
public
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the public
. Recent research showed that due to urbanisation waste product from each house is increasing which are polluting water, land as well as air. Because of
this
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 people are deprived of healthy
life
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 and becoming trigger in higher quality of livelihood.
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, traffic congestion and. Urbanisation
should be improve
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should improve
 for making better living standards of people. In other hand, governments and individual themselves should play a crucial role to solve the
problem
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.
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, to control traffic congestion
government
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 should
emphasised
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emphasise
on
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in
 the development of public transport so
vehicles
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the vehicles' number
vehicles' number
number
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 will controlled.
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, they should manage waste product management system for effective disposal of waste from each house.
In addition
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,
government
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 should migrate people of crowded places to free space area. Even though
government
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 trying their
best sometimes it
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best, sometimes it
 fails due to strong legislation so legislation should be
improve
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improved
improving
.
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,
peopl
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the people
people
 themselves must be aware of
effect
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the effect
 of
polluted environment
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the polluted environment
 and indulged in
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government programme
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the government programme
government programmes
 to save healthy environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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