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Some people agree that children should ask for parent’s advice. Some disagree. Discuss both views and share your opinion.

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It is debatable among most of the people
,
Accept space
,
whether young generation should take
advice
 from their guardian’s or not. A few people believe that guidance from parents is mandatory for children, while others argue.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of argument in detail and put forward evidences why I favour the perspective of asking parental help by
child
 is the effective method. Parents play a pivotal role in the physical and mental growth of the growing
child
. To make it more clear, children’s are not in the position of taking decisions for their future. So, they need
advice
 from their guardians related to their studies and jobs.
For instance
, a study conducted by the school authorities revealed that the
child
 can attain a valuable position in their workplace, if they are guided by their parents. In short, parent’s
advice
 is necessary for children. There are some people who think that there is no need of any kind of
advice
 from parents because
this
 will suppress the thinking power of the offspring. When a
child
 knows they would be guided by their elder ones,
then
 they stop using their brain.
This
 will reduce the capability of taking decision by themselves. A survey conducted by the local hospital,
for example
, declared that the
child
 who are totally dependent on their parents for decision has an adverse effect on the function of the brain. Clearly, some decisions should be made by children themselves without taking any help from their parents. In conclusion, the number of individuals who favours the proposition say that children need
advice
 from their guardian's in choosing education and future career, whereas others do not vote for it because
this
 stops the children’s brain activity.
However
, in my opinion,
besides
 the consequences due to
advice
 given by a parent to their
child
, children should always rely on parents
advice
.
Submitted by Rajneet Kaur on

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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