At universities in some countries, it is common for students, especially for those who have no scholarship, to have jobs while they study. They may work in offices, at the library, in labs or as teachers’ assistants. They earn money for living expenses and sometimes receive a reduction in tuition as well. Is this a good idea? Support your opinion with specific reasons and details.

It is true that the
stuents
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
prefer to work during
study period
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the study period
remains a controversy in the education field. While
this
issue
is fit
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is fitting
to
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for
somebody, I totally agree that
student
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students
the student
should concentrate on academy study with
noticeable exception
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the noticeable exception
that their family couldn’t give him
essential expenditure fee
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an essential expenditure fee
the essential expenditure fee
. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why working in
university
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a university
is beneficial.
Firstly
, it is absolute correct that by working students will be able to earn money from his jobs, and since they will likely be mature enough.
Secondly
, throughout working,
student
who has to work may obtain a lot of experience and skill
such
as
communication skill
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a communication skill
communication skills
, schedule control which
student
do not
touch
impart skills or knowledge to
teach
in
classroom
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the classroom
. By working, the important factor which
student
obtains that they will reduce the gap between theory and reality, it had better if the part-time
job
are closed
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is closed
to the their speciality
such
as computer
scientist
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scientist, student
student
should seek a
job
in computer shop or press
student
trying to be a collaborator of newspapers.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages to take into consideration before working.
Firstly
, the part-time
job
accounted for a significant free time which use for homework and self-research,
consequently
,
student
spend
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spends
no time to focus on studying
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its
lead
to
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in
the score decline.
Furthermore
, another problem is health. When working two or more jobs,
student
do not have
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does not have
enough time to relax and enjoy, during long period the body will get sick. From what has been discussed
above I
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above, I
can draw the conclusion that
student
should not
had
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have
a part-time
job
unless they get
in
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into
financial troubles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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