Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art, which helps to improve the quality of people’s lives. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is commendable to spend so much on
art
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as it is known to improve people’s
life
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.
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However it
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However, it
is more important that they spend more on other things that will improve people’s
life
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than spending on
art
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alone. As I write in my agreement
that that
pointing out something
that
it is more important to spend more money on other things than
art
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. I am going to list some of the things that will better the
life
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of people than spending on
art
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.
Firstly
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, money
should be spend
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should spend
on improving and repairing all the major road the city for easy access by the people. Having a good road network helps to improve the
life
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and activities of the people.
Secondly
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, they should
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
to spend more on electricity as the improvement in electricity is another great way of providing a better
life
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for all
citizen
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citizens
of the country’s and give a quality
life
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for the masses.
More over
in addition
Moreover
, they should make provision for free education in all institutions across the nation than spending on
art
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.
This
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little gesture will go a long way in improving the
life
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of people than spending on
art
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. For people that are educated and know the importance of
art
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, they can individually spend on
art
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.
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, providing a housing scheme for the people where they can buy or rent at a
more cheaper
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cheaper
cheapest
rate is
also
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another great way to improve the
life
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of the people and provide quality
life
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. In conclusion, I will agree that it is important for government to spend on other things to better the
life
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of the people than spend on
art
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. Thank you
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