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It’s been seen that reading for pleasure develops imaginations and better language skills than to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In our modern society, it is widely known that reading is one of the most beneficial things, since it improves imagination abilities and helps in developing language skills, which is better than watching TV all day without a positive outcome.
However
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, I strongly agree with
this
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.
Body paragraph 1
I strongly believe that spending time reading
books
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 about useful developments or things that are attractive to read will result in enhancing the function of the brain and the ability of imagination, and not only that, but
also
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 the speed level of reading and memorizing the words and the topic itself, because when teenagers,
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, read regularly it is going to increases their educational level at school rapidly.
For instance
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, when students start reading enjoyable science
books
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 ,
this
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 will benefit them by gaining more knowledge, which they can use in their classes .
Body paragraph 2
Another reason to support my argument, when individuals start purchasing
books
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,
this
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 will enhance their language abilities by reading different types of
books
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 and ways
such
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 as an e-book or a physical book. Since both of these types have an impact on the way of learning new academic vocabulary or phrases that they can use during their studies at university. Another clear example is that 55% of individuals in the United States read an e-book on the internet,
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 the flexibility of saving the new vocabulary into a dictionary where it can be accessed easily later.
Conclusion
On balance, reading
books
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 in today’s world is one of the most crucial things students can do in order to develop their skills in general.

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task response
Score: 6. You answer the question and give a clear opinion. However, the question asks about reading for pleasure, but your essay often talks about useful books, school, science, and university. Write more about enjoyable reading, such as stories, novels, or comics.
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Explain more clearly why reading is better than watching TV. For example, say that readers make pictures in their own minds, while TV gives them ready-made pictures.
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Your examples are relevant, but they need more detail. The 55% fact is not explained enough, and it may not be needed. A simple, clear example is often better than a number.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. Your main ideas are in a good order, but some sentences are very long. Split them into shorter sentences so the reader can follow your meaning more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Some links are not used in a natural way. For example, “Another reason to support my argument, when individuals start...” is not a full sentence. Try: “Another reason is that reading can improve language skills.”
coherence and cohesion
Keep each body part focused on one idea. Body 1 should only discuss imagination. Body 2 should only discuss language skills. This will make your essay more clear and strong.
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Your view is clear: you strongly agree. You give two main reasons: reading can help the mind, and it can help language learning.
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You use examples about students reading science books and people using e-books. These examples are linked to your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: an opening, two main body parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some link words well, such as “For instance”, “Another reason”, and “On balance”.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • develop imagination
  • active mental process
  • create mental images
  • use one’s imagination
  • visual information
  • passive entertainment
  • engage with a text
  • wider vocabulary range
  • sentence structure
  • language in context
  • improve spelling
  • strengthen grammar skills
  • reading comprehension
  • critical thinking
  • educational programmes
  • documentaries and news reports
  • listening skills
  • English subtitles
  • carefully selected content
  • form a reading habit
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