Several language are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by a very small number of people. Some people say that government should spend money on saving them, while, others think that it is waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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There are a vast variety of

languages

around the world, and some of them are threatened by extinction

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because they are spoken by a small group of

people

. Some

people

believe that governments should invest money in saving them,

while

others think it is a waste of money. I personally believe that all

languages

are very important, and both governments and individuals should put effort into keeping them. I strongly believe that all of the

languages

around the world should be saved, because of several reasons. On the one hand, the

languages

are nations' identity. Learning and exploring them helps us understand their culture. We can know what did they look like, and what did they value more. It not only leads to a better understanding of their culture but

also

helps find out how their

people

have got here now. By only conserving the

languages

, we can save a majority of information about those

people

. Some

people

believe that saving different

languages

is not important, because they do not consider what their current

language

comes from. They actually came from these old

languages

. A lot of words that we use in our daily lives have an older version.

For instance

, a great poem in Iran, Ferdosi, many many years ago, started to save the previous

Persian's

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language

. He wrote a lot of different stories in that

language

. It not only helps us understand those

people

and their lives, but

also

we could find the roots of our current

language

. I

also

recently read

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an article about Ferdosy which mentioned the kingdom in that era was helping Fersody to write

such

piece

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of art.

Thus

I believe the governments are most responsible.

Although

some

people

believe that investing in saving different

languages

are waste of money, I believe it is essential for their nations as they are valuable assets to learn about the culture and the roots of their current

languages

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Several language are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by a very small number of people. Some people say that government should spend money on saving them, while, others think that it is waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

Fully explain your ideas

Describe how your primary school education looks like?

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