Some people argue that we should do research into their family history. Others, agree with the view that we should focus on the present and future generations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are opposing views about whether people should learn more about their family
history
or the present and future generations require special a
ttentions.
Suggestion
attention
While I understand why some people support the former view, I am still in f
avor
promote over another
favour
of the latter. I understand why some people believe that people need to do research about their forefathers. From their point of view, doing
this
can make young generations obvious understand about their
history
and the difficulties to constitute achievements.
This
can gain s
tronger connection
Suggestion
a stronger connection
between e
lder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people and young people.
Furthermore
, in some communities, people who h
ave the strong family background be
Suggestion
has the strong family background been
have the strong family background be
respectable and reliable.
For example
, in Vietnam, many people ask for the family tree of other people before they decide
to begin
a relationship.
Nevertheless
, i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
still i
n side
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
inside
with those who believe that people should give effort to young generations.
This
is due to the fact that the
history
can not be changed, exploring family
history
would not do any things.
Therefore
, the concentration about development of young people is effective action on modern society.
For instance
, the government invests more money to promote the educational system,
this
provides better opportunities for young generations
such
as 4.0 learning, studying abroad and expanding new knowledge. In conclusion, despite acknowledging why people think researching about
history
is necessary, I hold the belief that the investment and attention about y
oung
Suggestion
younger
generations are more important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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