The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart compares the percentage of male and female teachers in different educational settings from nursery school to university. Significant differences between
men
and women are evident. Women held nearly all of the teaching posts in nursery and primary schools and the majority of posts in secondary schools (approximately 56
percent
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). They held the same percentage of posts as
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men
at the college level.
However
, a smaller proportion of women held teaching positions at training institutes, and, at universities, female lecturers were outnumbered by males by roughly two to one. For
men
, the pattern of employment was the reverse. Only 2
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of nursery school teachers and 10
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of primary teachers were
men
. They were more equally represented at
secondary
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and college
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.
However
, a significantly higher percentage of university lecturers were male (roughly 70
percent
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).
Overall
, the figure shows that gender is a significant factor in patterns of employment within the education sector.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • educational setting
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • nursery school
  • higher education
  • proportion
  • outnumber
  • trend
  • comparison
  • historical factors
  • social influence
  • teaching profession
  • data interpretation
  • balance
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