Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

It is true that many cities in the world are under huge traffic jam. I believe that not only the rapid increase of
car
ownership but
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ownership, but
also
lack of
infrastructure
that cause that issue. Due to fast economy growth in
past thirty years
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the past thirty years
, the amount people can afford and own
car
that has
increase
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increased
dramatically.
However
, the
infrastructure
has been built which was not sufficient for all means.
For example
, in
Hồ Chí Minh
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the Hồ Chí Minh city
city
, few
over passes
bridge formed by the upper level of a crossing of two highways at different levels
overpasses
, bridges were built recent years compare with thousands of cars were added. It is clear that the
over passes
bridge formed by the upper level of a crossing of two highways at different levels
overpasses
reduce the number of hot jam points inside
city
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the city
a city
.
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Additionally
, the road
were widened
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was widened
also
help increase efficiency of moving
car
outside
city
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the city
a city
cities
that help reduce the pressure inside
city
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the city
more quickly. Beside of investing
infrastructure
, the government can encourage residence using public transportation
such
as buses, metro system to commute that help reduce using
car
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a car
the car
. To do
so the
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so, the
government
improve
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improves
the bus and metro services and connect all
station
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stations
with main points inside
also
outside
city
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the city
so that passengers can reach all main
point
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points
from their house to main points without using
car
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a car
.
Moreover
, government support transportation
fare which
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fare, which
make
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makes
it more attractive. In conclusion,
although
I recognized that the vast amount of
car
cause
massive traffic jam
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a massive traffic jam
. I
would argued
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would argue
that the sufficient
infrastructure
and transportation can reduce that issue.

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