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At the present time,the population of somecountries include a relatively large number of young adults,compared to the number of older people

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In the past
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there were more of aged
people but
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people, but
 that younger people
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but nowadays
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the reverse is the case
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as
more younger
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younger
more young
 adults dominate in some countries.In my opinion
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I think there are more benefits to
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 situation than
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a drawback
drawbacks
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is
 a plethora of reasons why the middle age
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is
 of more advantage.
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first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
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 of all
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they are more energetic and more sound minded.In
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 places and other sport centres
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they
tends
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tend
 to do better and carry out
work
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 more effectively
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because of their fitness and strength.
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an older
person person may
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person may
work
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 within his
capacity but
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capacity, but
 a young person can
work
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 beyond their capability.
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secondly
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due to the advent of technology
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work
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 places are subjected to changes.They adjust easily to changes and they learn faster and better
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thereby making
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work process
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the work process
 smooth and going Having more of the middle age group
have
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has
 some negative aspect.
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older age group
have
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has
 more experience and are more diligent in
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 places.
aged
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Aged
 people have worked for longer times and as
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 have more knowledge of
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 and other life activities that can lead to the betterment of
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palces
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
places
palaces
pass
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 present generation do not have.
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due to the advent of technology
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younger tend to be carried away by social activities on the internet
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 as Facebook
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Twitter
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WhatsApp and so on
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thereby making them less focus and patient with
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In my opinion
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I believe that the positive aspect of
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situaton
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
 outweighs the negative view because it gives younger adult opportunities to show their skills and competence that the aged ones already have.
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it prepares them for the
furture
the time yet to come
future
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I feel there are more bene6 than drawback to
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