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Once children start school,teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Once a
child
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 joins a school, he is called as a student. It is a place where children spent most of their time and learn. A
teacher
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 plays an important role in sculpting the character, social behaviour and
also
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 obviously academical aspects of a student. In
this
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 passage, we will be going to discuss about the different aspects on why
teacher
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have
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has
 a great influence on their pupils. Normally infants spent most of the time in observing their surroundings and learn from it. As they spent most of their day in the school, they obviously observe their
teacher
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 for most of the time and get influenced by him to a great
lengths
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length
.
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, if faculty in school
communicate
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communicates
 politely to their mates,
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child
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the child
children
a child
 will learn from it and talk to their fellow students politely and
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 there is an impact on the social life of the student. To add to it, they are the ones who will guide the
child
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 stuff related to the academics.
This
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 will increase the intellectual ability and pave a path to the future of the
child
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.
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, if a faculty teaches about being an artist, how to
purse
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parse
pursue
pause
 it and
thus
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 bring an interest in the
child
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, it will drive him to determine his goals in life and lead it passionately. To end the discussion, I would like to say that
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teacher
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the teacher
 plays an important role in the intellectual and social behaviour of a
child
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 as they are the ones
children mostly
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children, mostly
 look
upto
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up to
 and determine where they themselves wanted to see themselves in
future
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the future
.

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