In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a results od eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food

It
is argue
Suggestion
is argued
argues
that government enforces the tax on junk food because lots of health risks
aa
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
the consequences of overeating of
this
kind of
foof
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
food
is on the rise.. I completely agree with that higher tax
shoyld
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
be paid by the companies.
Firstly
, it will reduce the number of health problems.
Secondly
taxes can be used to raise the awareness of the harmful effevts of junk food

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • fast food consumption
  • higher tax
  • discourage
  • government intervention
  • tax revenue
  • health promotion programs
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • negative effects
  • healthcare
  • fast food companies
  • healthier options
  • offset the cost
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