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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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It
 is a know fact that current generation students
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have
 more options to study abroad when compared to earlier. In
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will explain both advantages and
disadvatnages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
 of
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 development
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, students who wish to study outside the
country
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 think about various options like type of courses and quality of
education
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for
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For
 example, few courses are not available in their home
country
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 so they tend to move
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
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 to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their dream.
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,
quality
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the quality
 of
education
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 matters
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 as they will not find suitable
facilties
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
 or faculty when choosing a particular course.
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, They find more employment opportunities when compared to their home
country
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.
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 will enable them to find a suitable job
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in
 their career after their
education
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.
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, many foreign countries are offering huge salaries if they pursue their
education
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 in their
country
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. These
days many
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days, many
 people wanted to give these types of facilities to their
offsprint
the immediate descendants of a person
offspring
off sprint
off-spring
. So, students are migrating to foreign
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
cultures
 for better
education
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 and employment. Few students are migrating to different
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
cultures
 to pursue even if they are not capable of it. These are due to they are attracted by their friends or motivated by consultancies.
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, they are spending lots of money for completing their
education
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 and not getting benefitted after that as well.
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