Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Every person wants to be successful in his
life
.
when
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When
he becomes successful in his
life
,
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,
he will be at the top of the world and lived a
luxorious
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
lifestyle which is the dream of every human being
.
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.
According, to me
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According to me,
being a
celeberity
a widely known person
celebrity
bring more problems than benefits
.
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.
As a
celeberity
a widely known person
celebrity
one cannot enjoy his normal lifestyle
.
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.
Their
life
is full of restrictions like whenever they have to go somewhere
,
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,
they needed bodyguards due to the security threats. Their hangout places are confined only to 5 star hotels and security zone areas.They have to be in
limelight
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the limelight
for one
reason to
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reason, to
the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
. They, have to act according to the need of the time and demand of the time.
Moreover
, sometimes they have to compromise with their health conditions for their work a lot.
they
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They
always have to look glamorous in order to get in the good list of their fans. From the above
discussion it
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discussion, it
is concluded that
celeberities
a widely known person
celebrities
have to spend their
life
acc
(used of count nouns) every one considered individually
each
to the demand of their position and fans.
they
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They
, are not able to enjoy their lifestyle like a normal human being.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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