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In many modern societies, grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their parents. What do you think as the consequence of this?

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From the beginning, grandparents are imperative and plays a crucial role in every family, they are the root of heritage. But nowadays in the contemporary era, teenagers hardly spend
many
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much
time
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 with their parents.
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 essay will examine the reasons why adolescent do not spend quality
time
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 with grandparents and the worst consequence of
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.
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 and foremost, the main reason of
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 problem is
separation
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the separation
 of families. The joint families are broken up into nuclear families that impact more on youngsters. In single
families children
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families, children
 lost the importance of senior citizens because they hardly meet them,
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 destroying the relationship between adolescents and grandparents.
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, lack of interaction of
proginators
an ancestor in the direct line
progenitors
 among children is
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 a major cause. Parents are responsible of diminishing the bond of grandparents with children because parents do not teach their children the value of
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older
 people.
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, due to
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the advancement
 of technology teenagers
do not spent
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do not spend
 quality
time
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 with their grandparents. As above mentioned reasons lead to a plethora of atrocious results,
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 children will not get familiar with tradition or culture.
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, toddlers nourishment and bringing up will affect because grandparents are more experienced rather than parents in
nurture
the essential qualities or characteristics by which something is recognized
nature
. Beside
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, youngsters will not able to learn moral values. To conclude,
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 children are not spending quality
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 with their grandparents which is necessary for them. So, parents should teach them the value of senior citizens.

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