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Smokers have rights too, so they should be allowed to smoke in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#smokers #rights #smoke #places
Smoking is generally considered an unsafe habit to both the smoker and the
second
-hand
smoker
Suggestion
smoke
. It is disagreed that
tobacco
 users should be given the freedom to
smoke
 in
public areas in as
Suggestion
public areas as
 much as they should exercise their rights too. Analysing the
health
 problems it causes
second
-hand smokers as well as encroaching into non-smokers freedom will prove
this
.
First
 of all, the use of
tobacco
 products
such
 as cigarettes in public areas exposes non-smokers to detrimental
health
 issues. These non
tobacco
 users suffer more
health
 problems than the main smokers. In a recent research by WHO, individuals who do not
smoke but
Accept comma addition
smoke, but
 inhale the
smoke
 from
cigars
Suggestion
cigar
 smokers, suffer
severe consequences
Suggestion
the severe consequences
 of smoking
such
 as heart and lung cancer.
Therefore
, giving smokers freedom to
smoke
 in public areas poses
health
 dangers to non-smokers.
Secondly
, smoking publicly intrudes
into
Suggestion
in
 non-smokers right.
Although
 smokers feel the need to exercise their right
also
,
health
 and safety workers and organizations have requested that the rights of non-
tobacco
 users ought to be considered
first
 as some habits, particularly smoking should not be practiced publicly due to its harmful effects on people and the environment. Because of
this
, the rights of non-smokers should not be encroached on as their rights should be a priority. In conclusion, it is disagreed that the use of
tobacco
 should not be done in public places due to the negative effects it has on the
health
 of non-smokers and
also
 the interference to the rights of non
tobacco
 users which is considered paramount.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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