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Success in business can be assured if you have great marketing and promotion. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#success #business #promotion
It
can not
can not
cannot
 be denied that many companies spend a colossal amount of money on advertising their products or services. Some people claim that marketing and promotion
is
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are
 the principal reason for a successful business. In my opinion, it is not through advertising to bring the success to a business but
also
 through the
quality
 of products or services to help maintain
loyalty
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the loyalty
 of customers. Obviously, marketing and promotion creates a huge impact on selling products or services. Thanks to effective advertising, companies can produce brand awareness to the public, especially the target customers.
That is
also
 the reason why so many new or unknown companies employ mass media to publicize their products and establish their position in the market.
However
, there is another
certain
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certainty
 that
quality
 of products or services play the equal role in a successful business. After all, no matter how popular the products or services are by using advertising, if they are poor
standards
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standards, then
then
 they can not
last
longer
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long
 in a competitive market. The consumers now are more conscious and have a lot of other alternative brands to satisfy their standards.
Moreover
,
quality consistency
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quality, consistency
 helps build brand credibility of the company and maintain customers’ loyalty to their products.
For example
, there are a variety of shampoo brands I know and experienced through advertising on
television but
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television, but
 I have spent my full loyalty to Pentin brand which gives me a satisfaction for many years
by
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with
 its high
quality
. In conclusion,
although
 we have to admit the necessary of marketing and promotion as it is strategy to attract customers, I strongly believe that a good
quality
 of products and services should
also
 be paid equal attention because it helps companies build the consumers’ trust and the company’s reputation.
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