A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He / she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter suggest an interesting part of the city to live in describe the public transport in your city say how your friend can meet new people there
Dear Anne,
I hope you and your family are all good. I'm so glad to hear the amazing news you have shared with me yesterday. I can't believe that you made your decision
finally
to move up and live here in Sharjah.
Regarding your question about the best place to live, I guess the ideal place for you would be ALQasimiah for many reasons. Firstly
, it is located in the city centre and you can find all kinds of services around you.
Secondly
, you will probably think about the transportation point. The bus station, from where buses travel to the other emirates, is five minutes walking only. Taxies and buses' stops are available everywhere as well.
Finally
, the people here are very friendly. You can start a conversation easily with them. Social activities and festivals are run all over the year, so I think you will make new friends and connections very fast.
Please let me know the date you're planning to come here to help you arrange a few things before your arrival.
Regards,
NouraSubmitted by nawartomry on
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task achievement
To improve task response, consider adding a bit more detail about public transportation - such as the frequency and reliability of the services - to make the information more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
For coherence, ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. Perhaps, add a line or two that subtly connects the discussion about transportation to the friendly nature of people, enhancing the natural flow of ideas.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and polite greeting and closing, which provides a warm and friendly tone.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph presents a single clear idea, which enhances readability and understanding.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone throughout the letter is suitable and friendly, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite