Some people think that Public Health in a country can be improved by government making laws regarding nutritious food. (agree/disagree)

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Trends associated with
health
Suggestion
the health
of the people have been
plummeted
Suggestion
plummeting
in recent years due to the repercussions of the junk foods being widely available all around the world. Some individuals feel that legislation should impose certain laws regarding
health
giving
food
. I agree to the fact that
wholesome healthy
Accept comma addition
wholesome, healthy
food
is the key to success and is imperative for the science and art of preventing disease, prolonging life and promoting human
health
.
this
Suggestion
This
will be shown by
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
how ban on certain items and encouraging people to eat local will change the psyche of people.
Firstly
, the
health
market is able to earn millions and millions of money by fooling people and selling their so-called '
health
items' which barely has any nutritive value in it.
For example
, many
health
drinks
such
as Horlicks, Milo, Bournvita, etc.
show
Suggestion
Show
that they possess daily requirements of vitamins.
However
, if their label is checked it shows the main ingredient as sugar and flour.
Therefore
,
government
Suggestion
the government
needs to ban
such
items which
sells
Suggestion
sell
faulty products labelled as
health
Suggestion
healthy
.
This
will discourage the producers to fool their consumers and will be forced to sell what they claim.
Secondly
, law enforcement should encourage their citizens to eat
local
Suggestion
locally
produced
food
.
for
Suggestion
For
instance, in Japan
,
Accept space
,
it is widely seen that people has
predilection
Suggestion
a predilection
for local foods and there are few outlets
such
as MC. Donald's, K.F.C.
etc.
Suggestion
Etc.
while
Suggestion
While
they have their own wholesome
food
outlets.
This
is because of the fact that the price in which they can eat one burger in the same price they are able to eat wholesome healthy full meal.
As a result
, Japan has a very healthy ratio of people with nutritious
food
. As seen above, curtailment of disguised products and encouraging individuals to eat
healthy nutritious
Accept comma addition
healthy, nutritious
wholesome local foods does increase overall public
health
in a country.
Thus
, each and every
bureaucrats
Suggestion
bureaucrat
should make certain laws crucial to
country's
Suggestion
the country's health
health
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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