Some people think that the government should make laws regarding nutrition and healthy lifestyle, while others think that it is a matter of personal choice and personal responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some say that states should legislate new laws to limit people’s consumption of fast
food
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and unhealthy habits. Others argue that people should be responsible for their own health. Today’s world offers a variety of
food
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and activities, and it is hard to resist the sweet and unhealthy ones.
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, states
can not
can not
cannot
force people to live in a certain way because
this
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will lead to unwanted consequences. On the one hand, the government should watch the market and ban some of the extremely unhealthy products due to people’s ignorance. Most people do not know or care which of the biscuits
contain
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contains
highly toxic preservatives, but officials do know and they have a responsibility to the public;
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, they must watch closely and act if there is a manufactured good that threatens public health. In most developed countries, governments have regulations that describe how much preservative can
bu
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
be
put in
food
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packages, and they check if producers are following these regulations from time to time.
On the other hand
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, sanctions that put on people’s lifestyles are not helping some individuals. Some people have a very stressful job or they are depressed due to personal issues. In either way, they find comfort in junk
food
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or in a sedentary life. Every individual has different needs and if they are forced
to
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into
a certain way of life they can lose their control over everything and kill themselves. In conclusion, states should control people’s habits to a certain degree, but they
can not
can not
cannot
make it obvious by introducing laws. There are already many regulations that
controls
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control
the products and they can improve them to help people stay fit and healthy.
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