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Politicians private lives should not be published in newspapers ,To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#politicians #lives #newspapers
Some would argue that political leaders' personal
life
 should not bring out to media where others believe that
its
it is
it's
 good to publish.
This
 essay agrees to show the
people leaders
Accept comma addition
people, leaders
 their
life
 As they must be moral to the people in their personal lifestyle too. (45)
First
 of all, Most of the people they want to follow their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 or inspired
leader
. If we show their personal lifestyle and habits they can try to follow those things as they treat that
leader
 as a role model. It leads to a good society to generate more leaders
to
Suggestion
of
in
 the nation.
For example
, Some media channels telecast the Prime
minster
any of certain cathedrals and large churches; originally connected to a monastery
Minster
minister
 of India Mr.Narendra Modi's lifestyle like He regular practicing yoga exercise to manage stress and physical fit. So most of his followers are
started
Suggestion
starting
 to practice yoga and got benefited.
it's
Suggestion
It's
 because of publishing his habits.
In addition
, personal
life
 shows the actual
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of the person. The profession and personal
life
 help people to elect a good
leader
. Some leaders good in their professional
life
, but he may have bad habits like drug or alcohol addicted person. These types of leaders are not good for the public.
For example
, The Andhra Pradesh ex-governor is a drug-addicted person. He illegally used most of the government income to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 his bad habits. One newspaper exposed his bad habits that found in their investigation. To Sum up, It would be good for society if printed publications exposed the political
leader
's personal lives.
This
 information might help as tips to the followers to become a
leader
.
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