The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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ten years, the number of shopping transactions carried out online has increased dramatically.

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growth. I do not believe there is any reason to believe that traditional shops are under threat in any way.

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, online retailers are not actually that much cheaper than traditional shops once you factor in all the extra costs. Some people predict the death of the high street because shops like Amazon and Alibaba often sell goods more cheaply than traditional retailers. While

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may sometimes be true, I would argue that after you have added the cost of shipping.

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is often very little difference in price between the two.

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, if you need to return the goods for some reason,

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you may be liable for the cost of re-shipping the item back to the supplier and,

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, you could actually end up being out of pocket. Another factor is convenience.

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it is undeniable that ordering from home is more comfortable than going to a shopping centre, very often when consumers purchase items, they generally need to use them right away.

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is particularly true of every day items

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as food and household goods. If there is the choice between walking 10 minutes to a store, or waiting 24 hours for delivery.

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the local store will always win.

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, online retailers can never offer the same retail experience as shops. When you buy online, you have to rely on the accuracy of either a written description or a photo to make your purchasing choice. Obviously,

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cannot compare to the experience of entering a shop and physically seeing and touching the product.

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, no computer programme can replicate the feeling of actually trying on a shirt to see how it fits.

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, people still tend to like being helped in their decision-making processes by a shop assistant, especially when they are buying expensive electrical items that may be confusing to operate and understand. In conclusion, the fact that

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the high street shop

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no more expensive than their online equivalents, and they offer a better in-shop experience means I believe that they are in no danger of disappearing soon.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Although abuse of the system is inevitable, social welfare payments are essential to protect the rights that citizens have to a guaranteed minimum income in a democratic society. Do you agree or disagree?