In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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People do not feel safe

anymore

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anymore, although

although

the rates of severe crimes in some countries are on the decline. The main cause of

this

problem is that serious crimes are not easily forgettable and the most viable solution is to educate the victims. The main cause of people not feeling safe is that severe

crime

is difficult to forget.

That is

to say that the after effects of a

crime

remain in the victim's mind for years to come, which is

also

reflected in their personality.

As a result

, the person does not feel safe because he thinks that the same

crime

might be repeated in his

life

For example

, The Sunday Times reported that

although

the

crime

rate in Nairobi decline, the locals are still in a state of fear because they cannot eliminate the thought of the

crime

happening again in their lives.

However

, the most viable solution to deal with

such

a situation is to educate the victims through publicity campaigns.

In other words

, the local security personnel and police officers could meet all the victims and take them in confidence regarding the security of the country and their safety.

This

would result in the victims getting their confidence back in

life

and they could even feel safer in society.

For instance

, when the Orlando police officer met with the survivors of shooting attack and educate them in public gatherings, they started to feel much safer in the society among other people. In conclusion, people feel insecure because it is difficult to overlook the serious crimes in

life

, but educating sufferers in public could solve

this

problem, and

also

help them live a normal

life

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

278 words

6.50

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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