In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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People do not feel safe
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anymore, although
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the rates of severe crimes in some countries are on the decline. The main cause of
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problem is that serious crimes are not easily forgettable and the most viable solution is to educate the victims. The main cause of people not feeling safe is that severe
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is difficult to forget.
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to say that the after effects of a
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remain in the victim's mind for years to come, which is
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reflected in their personality.
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, the person does not feel safe because he thinks that the same
crime
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might be repeated in his
life
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, The Sunday Times reported that
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the
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rate in Nairobi decline, the locals are still in a state of fear because they cannot eliminate the thought of the
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happening again in their lives.
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, the most viable solution to deal with
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a situation is to educate the victims through publicity campaigns.
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, the local security personnel and police officers could meet all the victims and take them in confidence regarding the security of the country and their safety.
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would result in the victims getting their confidence back in
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and they could even feel safer in society.
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, when the Orlando police officer met with the survivors of shooting attack and educate them in public gatherings, they started to feel much safer in the society among other people. In conclusion, people feel insecure because it is difficult to overlook the serious crimes in
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, but educating sufferers in public could solve
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problem, and
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help them live a normal
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • availability heuristic
  • media coverage
  • misinformation
  • urbanization
  • community cohesion
  • justice system
  • economic inequality
  • community policing
  • media literacy
  • surveillance
  • swift justice
  • social cohesion
  • neighborhood watch
  • deterrent
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